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Yes Aldo Lun (You Are The One)
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Third writing piece for CoWriMo 2015. A villanelle.
This public article was written by alynnidalar, and last updated on 23 Feb 2015, 18:59.

[comments] Menu 1. Introduction 2. Tirina 3. English
[top]Introduction

A villanelle is a type of poem characterized by a strict structure with repeated lines. The traditional structure is five three-line stanzas followed by a four-line stanza in the following pattern (letter indicates rhyme; capital letters are repeated lines): A1bA2 abA1 abA2 abA1 abA2 abA1A2

Probably the most famous villanelle is "Do not go gentle into that good night" by Dylan Thomas.

It is not a traditional form of poetry among Tirina speakers; nevertheless, here is a villanelle in Tirina. It sounds rather overwrought and terrible when translated into English, but don't worry--it's at least that bad in Tirina too. Meter is mostly anapestic tetrameter, but the second line of each tercet (three-line stanza) is anapestic trimeter (or tetrameter with a fixed caesura at the fourth foot). Why yes, I did spend a lot of time on Wikipedia reading up on poetry rather than working on this, why do you ask?

[top]Tirina

Tewa karn, tewa afarn, ote suka ıkun,
Ye towuyın, lid edir, de sa:
Tofismawin, tos ka'a, soe yes aldo lun.

Aldo eyi ınan aldo tetanil yun.
On reinhedlin uye esa,
Tewa karn, tewa afarn ote/rıl pin suka ıkun.

Todemalewi' ato towuron ısun.
Sar toarki lid edir towuyındaka:
Tofismawin, tos ka'a, soe yes aldo lun.

Tofisedio yon take aldo kerun,
Hen, tosuren enanko heka!
Tewa karn, tewa afarn rıl pin suka ıkun.

A, tohayirlin soa ko kel toyasun.
To'oedilin wuse ko tal:
Tofismawin, tos ka'a, soe yes aldo lun.

Ilen uye toteindas kura, pelun.
Las, towuyınle ato ke tern ni uye:
Tewa karn, tewa afarn, ote suka ıkun,
Tofismawin, tos ka'a, soe yes aldo lun.

[top]English

Note: no attempt has been made to maintain meter/rhyme in English.

In the forest, in the valley, at the harsh beginning,
He advised, this man, like a king:
Go on then, never frightened, because you are the One.

This mud between my toes is venom.
It drags me down often,
In the forest, in the valley, at the harsh beginning.

I am giving up, I am losing disgracefully.
Then I remember what the man has been saying:
Go on then, never frightened, because you are the One.

I must still travel along this line,
Almost I understand why!
In the forest, in the valley, at the harsh beginning.

Oh, I am running now and forever, I am overcoming.
I declare over and over again:
Go on then, never frightened, because you are the One.

In the future, I will have joyfully and entirely won.
Yes, I will teach it all to my son:
In the forest, in the valley, at the harsh beginning,
Go on then, never frightened, because you are the One.
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